![]() ![]() I need to be a bit worried for Viv, and for that I need to know enough about her to care what happens to her. I know the tag line is "High Fanstasy & Low Stakes" but for me the low stakes meant low engagement. Help me understand why Viv *cannot* fail in the new venture and go back to that life.Īnd when the scene arrives where the hero tells the prospective love interest 'You don't know all the terrible, awful miscellaneous things I've done.' I confess, without some examples, I eyerolled at that point. Tell me of Viv's life changing first taste of coffee. Foreshadow how dangerous Fennus can be before he returns. Just some vignettes in italics would do.įlesh out the bonds with Gallina and Roon. I understand wanting to start the story at her entering Thune but how about some interstitial flashback chapters with some backstory. Lots of things are hinted at but I could really use some more backstory. I think I've come to the conclusion that I just don't know enough about Viv or the world she lives in. (Full disclosure: I'm not a coffee drinker.) I finished a few days ago and have been mulling over why I'm not as taken with this book as the majority in the group. ![]()
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